In today's blog, I have rewritten a small part from my reading of Bullet in the Brain (Tobias Wolff)Bullet in the Brain (Tobias Wolff). This will show you that changing one part of a story could affect the whole story. I provide my own personal action scene that has always been an issue in my life. Anders couldn’t get to the bank until just before it closed. The line was endless, and he got stuck behind two women that were having an conversation that peek his interest putting him in a better temper. The two women were talking about their love for writing, and it triggers a far back memory. Clearing his mind from his stressful day looking at papers from students that have not gotten the concept of writing. He remembers when he fell in love with the art of and his life was ahead of his. A baseball field. Yellow grass, the whirr of insects, himself leaning against a tree as the boys of the neighborhood gather for a pickup game. Someone asked one of the boy's cousin that was from out of town what position he wanted to play. “shortstop,” the boy says. “Short's the best position they is,” was Anders memory. He had never heard grammar liked that. Those two words had at one point roused and elated him. Now, Anders is a book critic known for the weary, elegant savagery with which he dispatched almost everything he reviewed. With the line still doubled around the rope, one of the tellers stuck a “POSITION CLOSED” sign in her window and walked to the back of the bank, where she leaned against a desk and began to pass time with another teller shuffling papers. This gave Anders time to think about all things that use to matter. My scene... “Hey babe, what time was our reservations?” “At 8:30 pm, why? “Oh, no reason I just wanted to know what time I needed to be ready by. I love you and see you when you get here.” Walking out the shower to my room I glans at my phone, Omg! It’s 6:48 pm. I haven't even started my makeup or found something to where he’s going to kill me. I’m standing in the middle of my room wondering where I lost time. O.k., don’t panic let's start with my makeup. I run over to my vanity turn to the lights and look at what am I going to do first. Please God, take to wheel and help me draw these eyebrows on like identical twins. Look at that, muah, muah blow kisses to myself as I admired my art across my forehead. Next what color eyeshadow? Pink, brown, black or glitter. I don’t know because I haven't found an outfit. I ran over to my closet and start looking at my compacted stacks of clothes. Let's not make this complicated , grab a dress. I found a nice red dress that clings to all my curves even my muffin top. Who cares, I still look sexy and I have a man, the things I tell myself when I feel insecure. I lay the dress on my bed alongside all my jewelry, and Back to beating my face. Wow, God are you taking time from me, now it’s 7:38 pm. He's going to be here any minute talking about how I’m never ready. Whatever, now I’m mad at myself, I never have enough time. After an hour and forty minutes later, we jump in an Uber to go out for dinner.
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Today's blog is about a present scene from my life using creative Nonfiction, after reading What is Creative Nonfiction? (Lee Gutkind) | Making Scenes in Memoir (Lee Martin). It's Saturday, I'm never off but today I am. As I lay here in bed thinking about what I want to do. I see the sun peeking in from behind my black closed curtains, letting me know it’s nice outside. My son Amir is in his room shouting at his game with the volume up at like 100%. “Come on bro, you got me killed!”, he said. One of my daughters must be downstairs watching YouTube videos with the volume up too. It sounds like a bunch of people is in my house. I get up from my bed walk to my door and yelled, “Amir, turn that T.V. down, everyone doesn’t need to know your getting killed,” he doesn't respond. “AMIR TURN THAT T.V. DOWN OR IM TAKING THE GAME!” “Wait wait wait mom, no please, I’m turning it down now.” “Now, who's downstairs?” “ Me mom, it’s Alana.” “Why do you have that t.v. so loud?” “Because I couldn’t hear over Amir yelling. Wait, mom, you're not going to work today?” "No, I took the day off, we going to go out.” "Where are we going?” “I don’t know where yet, but you’ll need to get dress. I’m not staying in this house all day.” Walking back into my room and said to myself what am I going to wear. I have to wear something cute, can’t waste a day off. After throwing my whole closet on my bed, I found something to wear. Now, where are we going to go, to the beach no it’s too late in the morning for that. To the park, no that’s to regular, think think think. I got it, they have never been to downtown Philly where the historic part is. My children come rushing into my room all at once to show me their dress. “Mom where are we going?”, they said all at once. “I think we're going to go downtown.” “What’s downtown?”, Alana said. “History...” “History?” “Yes, let’s go. Amir make sure the door is lock.” We get into my car I drive for five minutes. I pull into the 69th street parking garage and begin to shift the gears to P for (park). “Mom, this is not downtown,” says, my oldest daughter Alissa. “I know, we’re taking public transportation for this trip. Parking Is too much and time-consuming.” After getting off the train, we walk to the Liberty Bell. The line is ridiculous, rapped the whole building. My children and I have never seen the Liberty Bell. So, we waited patiently. The line moved pretty fast. One by one everyone inching closer and closer behind one another making the line look like its moving faster. We made through the doors to security. Security checked us like we were catching a flight. Moving through the crowd ducking our heads and swaying to the side as visitors took pictures. finally, I see the Liberty Bell. There so many people surrounding it like their looking at Jesus himself. After, sliding through all the visitors we were able to snap a picture. Today's blog will be quotes taking from three authors processes of writing. I also added my own quotes of my process of reading. All of the quotes are written in a scene as if we are were having a conversation. Setting by myself waiting for my boyfriend to get off from work. "Miss can I get you something," the bartender asked me. I told him I have a Margarita with a sugar rim. While I waited for my drink I looked to my right and saw three people, one man and two women engaged in a deep conversation. I listened to them talk waiting for the right time to jump into their conversation.
The man said to the women, “Prewriting usually takes about 85 percent of the writer’s time. It includes the awareness of his world from which his subject is born. In prewriting, the writer focuses on that subject, spots an audience, chooses a form which may carry his subject to his audience. Prewriting may include research and daydreaming, note-making and outlining, title-writing and lead-writing”, (Don Murray). I took that as my cue to jump in and I said “ when I get ready to write I envision a scene and write it down.” then I introduce myself and ask them why were they talking about writing. “We are coaches, encouragers, developers, creators of environments in which our students can experience the writing process for themselves,” (Don Murray). Oh o.k, so how do you write a perfect paper with no experience? “For me, the last 20 percent of a book’s improvement takes 95 percent of the effort—all in the editing. I can honestly say not one page I’ve ever published appears anywhere close to how it came out in first draft. A poem might take sixty versions. I am not much of a writer, but I am a stubborn little bulldog of a reviser,” (Mary Karr). “Say to yourself in the kindest possible way, look ,honey, all we’re going to do for now is to write a description of the river at sunrise, or the young child swimming in the pool at the club, or the first time the man sees the woman he will marry. That is all we going to do for now. We are just going to take this bird by bird. But we are going to finish this one short assignment,” (Anne Lamott). “The writing process itself can be divided into three stages: prewriting, writing, and rewriting. The amount of time a writer spends in each stage depends on his personality, his work habits, his maturity as a craftsman, and the challenge of what he is trying to say. It is not a rigid lock-step process, but most writers most of the time pass through these three stages,” (Don Murray). Karr, what made you fall in love with writing? “Since I was always interested in how to be a writer, I also gobbled up literary biographies—Walter Jackson Bate on Keats and Coleridge; Enid Starkie on Baudelaire and Rimbaud; Diane Middlebrook on Anne Sexton; Ian Hamilton on Robert Lowell; Paul Mariani on William Carlos Williams. Getting a sense of the person’s time in history often helped me to understand their styles in that context—what literary pressures and fashions and values of the day were forging their pages.” And, what makes you a writer? “Just picking up a pen makes you part of a tradition of writers that dates thousands of years back and includes Homer and Toni Morrison and cave artists sketching buffalo. It’s a corny attitude to revere writers in this celebrity age, when even academics cry the author is dead. Go to any book award ceremony, and we’re like America’s Homeliest Video. We are the inward-looking goofballs who spill on our blouses and look befuddled in our selfies.” Lamott, you do I start a story I’m trying to tell? “There are probably a number of ways to tell your story right, and someone else may be able to tell you whether or not you’ve found one of these ways. The right words and sentences just do not come pouring out like ticker tape most of the time.” I normally, open your mind to a place where you can relate to the topic, this helps me to get started. I also look at writing as if it was a long road trip to somewhere you never been. You know you have to get to your destination, but don’t know how to get there. So, you let your GPS guild you. A few minutes later I saw my boyfriend coming. I thank them for keeping me occupied and all the information. I excused myself and meet up with my boyfriend. Today's blog is my answers to The Proust Questionnaire. This is my second time taking the questionnaire. You can peek at the first one I took and compare how my answers have changed a little. Some of my answers have been changed because as you broaden your horizons, you see things differently. The Proust Questionnaire has its origins in a parlor game popularized (though not devised) by Marcel Proust, the French essayist and novelist, who believed that, in answering these questions, an individual reveals his or her true nature. Here is the basic Proust Questionnaire.
__1.__What is your idea of perfect happiness? Having a successful career with five bedrooms, two bathroom home and driving a Aston Martin. __2.__What is your greatest fear? Never getting married. __3.__What is the trait you most deplore in yourself? Feeling I have to help people all the time. __4.__What is the trait you most deplore in others? I hate when others are not appreciative. __5.__Which living person do you most admire? All my children, they inspire me like no one else ever could. __6.__What is your greatest extravagance? MAKEUP! I can’t stop buy prestige makeup. __7.__What is your current state of mind? Open. __8.__What do you consider the most overrated virtue? Always tell the truth, a lot of people can’t handle the truth and you can’t tell the truth at work. So why say telling the truth is a good thing. telling truth could hurt someone’s feelings and It can cause you to get fired. __9.__On what occasion do you lie? When there’s no video of proof. __10.__What do you most dislike about your appearance? My stomach, I’m shaped like a pot pie around my waste. __11.__Which living person do you most despise? I don’t, disliking someone would drain my energy. __12.__What is the quality you most like in a man? Hight and symmetrical facial structure. __13.__What is the quality you most like in a woman? Cuteness and fun. __14.__Which words or phrases do you most overuse? What ever the case may be. __15.__What or who is the greatest love of your life? My children! __16.__When and where were you happiest? Last May, when the semester ended I was laying in my bed checking my final grades. Not only did I pass, I received honors. I felt like I did when I passed the last level on Mario and got Princess Peach. _17.__Which talent would you most like to have? Singing. __18.__If you could change one thing about yourself, what would it be? Letting people take my kindness for my weakness. __19.__What do you consider your greatest achievement? Buying my home. __20.__If you were to die and come back as a person or a thing, what would it be? Blue Ivy. __21.__Where would you most like to live? Here in PA, I love traveling to other places but Pa is home. __22.__What is your most treasured possession? My heart. __23.__What do you regard as the lowest depth of misery? Don’t know… __24.__What is your favorite occupation? Fashion and design. __25.__What is your most marked characteristic? I’m optimistic. __26.__What do you most value in your friends? Loyalty. __27.__Who are your favorite writers? Me, I love reading back something I wrote. __28.__Who is your hero of fiction? Wonder Women, she’s underestimated and fun. __29.__Which historical figure do you most identify with? Harriet Tubman. __30.__Who are your heroes in real life? My closest and longest friends. __31.__What are your favorite names? Sky (spelled all kinds of ways), Reine, Love, Mia, Heart. __32.__What is it that you most dislike? A selfish man. __33.__What is your greatest regret? I have no regrets, everything that has happens to me had a purpose or a lesson. __34.__How would you like to die? Old and fabulous. __35.__What is your motto? There’s are only to people in the world. People getting and people getting got. I’m gonna be a getter. Today's blog is my thoughts on the approaches It took me to finish my first draft of my research paper.
As I prepare to write my research paper “ Should the U.S. mandate paid vacation to all full-time workers?” I have found a few sources that will help in defense of my argument. Listed below are links to my sources and an annotated bibliography.
Sources: Authors: Francis, David R. 8/7/2006 http://search.ebscohost.com.libdb.dccc.edu/login.aspx?direct=true&db=aph&AN=21844495&site=ehost-live Authors: Altonji, Joseph G.1, Oldham, Jennifer2. 2003 http://search.ebscohost.com.libdb.dccc.edu/login.aspx?direct=true&db=aph&AN=10809729&site=ehost-live Kurtzleben, Danielle. “Lots Of Other Countries Mandate Paid Leave. Why Not The U.S.?” NPR,NPR, 15 July 2015, www.npr.org/sections/itsallpolitics/2015/07/15/422957640/lots-of-other-countries-mandate-paid-leave-why-not-the-us. MichaelMoore.“WheretoInvadeNext(2015).”IMDb,IMDb.com, www.imdb.com/title/tt4897822/. “Why Unlimited Vacation May Sound Better Than It Really Is.” Fortune, fortune.com/2016/03/10/best-companies-unlimited-vacation/. So far all of my sources agree with the idea of all full-time workers should be entitled to a paid vacation. The sources state the importance of paid leave by providing information of the studies that were reported and recorded. They also, listed organizations that are fighting for the cause like, "Take Back Your Time." The organizations have taken this matter to President Obama attention to bring awareness and to create a new law for vacation. As for now, no laws have been created, but the fight for mandating a paid vacation continues. As I continue to do my researcher I have not yet come across a source that outright says they disagree with the idea of a mandate for a paid vacation to full-workers. So, do employers know laws or an act for mandatory paid vacation would never get passed?. This leaves me to dig deeper into the risks that would happen if this was a law in America. Would the America workers even take a vacation after the legislation has passed? I’m left with a lot of questions that need answers. The sources I found are the reasons that I want to write about this topic. The sources will help get my point across and give me a better understanding of why this issue is essential. Then I would be able to shut down my counter-argument. Persuade my audience to agree with me and open their eyes to facts. After watching the documentary Where to Invade Next , by Michael Moore I wanted to research one out of the three topics listed below.
Topic 1: Paid Vacation Time Research question: Should American workers be given an equal amount of paid vacation time? Argument: I'm a single mother of three children, working full-time and going school. There is little time spent as a family. My current employer does provide paid vacation, and every year the time increases. With my paid vacation time I relax, and I give my children the mommy and me time. But, unfortunate not everybody works for companies like mines. So, for another person like me jugging a schedule like mines without a paid vacation to recuperate. They could become stress, sick, and cause self-destruction. So, I believe paid vacation should be awarded to any full-time worker. Topic 2: School homework Research question: Should American students get homework? Argument: Giving children homework limits family time and after-school activities. Children are in school eight hours, five days a week and have to do an hour or more of homework. When do the children have time to find themselves and do what they like. I spend an hour with my children doing homework, leaving no time to play. Eat, wash up, go to bed, and repeat. I do not think it should be like this. I should be able to spend the little time I have with after school doing some activity. Most children have gifts of talent, but never got to develop them, and now stuck at a dead end job that they hate. It should be a balance of learning and growing into adulthood. Topic 3: Women Leadership Research question: Should there be an equal amount of women in power to run things? Argument: Women being in power?, I say, Yes! I say yes for a lot of reasons, but here are some most women naturally juggle multiple things at once. There are caring, sensitive, warm, considerate and thinks long-term. There are a lot more things that women can do, but wouldn't you want someone that have your best entrees at heart?. Today ‘s blog is on a the documentary Where to Invade Next, Michael Moore.
In the documentary Where to Invade Next, Michael Moore traveled to about eight different countries in search of ways to make The United States of America better. Each country Moore visits he inquiries about different issues that typical Americans have. The issues were vacation time, pay, health care, drug laws, inmates freedom, people rights, and so much more. Each country welcome more with open arms and express their way of living. Moore challenged the country on why they do and treat their citizens they what they do. He also asked where did they come of up with these rules of life. All of the countries responses was the same. They treated their citizens the way they did because it was the right thing to do. Most of their rules of living amongst each other came from The United States of America. So, through all his traveling he founds out The United States of America gave all of the other countries these great ideas and fell short implementing these same ideas in the own country. The citizens of these other countries are living happier and longer than the average American. They share their wealth and care about their neighbor. They are living the life that our founding father wanted for America.
Today's blog I will reflect back by answering some questions about my life-choice memoir.1. Who did you work with to compose your life-choice memoir? Was this a good approach?
I choose to with my boyfriend on. This was a right approach, and he never heard this part of my life that lead me to where I am now. This untold story provided him with more background and understanding about me. 2. What rhetorical mode and genre are you using? I chose to use descriptive and narrative writing for my life-choice memoir. 3. When did you write this project? Good approach? I started this projects about three weeks. I began by thinking about with was the most important life-choice I had to make. This was not the right approach I should have started early and paste myself. 4. Where did you write this project? Good approach? I wrote any moment I was free at work, in my bed, and whenever class was canceled. This was a good approach for because I was able to stay on top of my work. Why did you choose to write about your chosen topic? Good choice? 5. I choose this topic to inspire someone else who is having the same struggles I had. I love my choice; this topic was something I had struggle with after having my children into my work life. My life-chose was not only for me it was for my children, my sisters, brother and little cousins. I want to show them that it's more here in life and be their guide to how to achieve success. 6. How did it feel to write this narrative ("during, after, and since")? Do you have any "if only" moments that can help you revise the draft? It felt good to playing Morgan Freeman to my own story. I do not any if only moments, what way was is done. 7. How will you revise your narrative? I would not revise my narrative, and I like it is. If there were suggestions that would better my narrative, I would strongly consider them. |
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